"Eyes like TV static" good one. Nice writing, now here's my premonition: You're going to tell me you don't want my advice but I'm going to give it to you anyway: forget putting a scene of flash fiction out there for the rest of us sharks to nibble on (or not) and instead keep it close until you've come up with a solid 5-10 pages with a pay off. Trust me, it'll make you want to actually keep working on something more (until you actually see it through) than just sharing dribs and drabs at a time. That way you'll keep at one idea until it's finished. And I mean like, KA BOOM finished. I'm not one to quote Hemingway, but the man did say something like: If you don't finish, nothing means a damn.
"Eyes like TV static" good one. Nice writing, now here's my premonition: You're going to tell me you don't want my advice but I'm going to give it to you anyway: forget putting a scene of flash fiction out there for the rest of us sharks to nibble on (or not) and instead keep it close until you've come up with a solid 5-10 pages with a pay off. Trust me, it'll make you want to actually keep working on something more (until you actually see it through) than just sharing dribs and drabs at a time. That way you'll keep at one idea until it's finished. And I mean like, KA BOOM finished. I'm not one to quote Hemingway, but the man did say something like: If you don't finish, nothing means a damn.
this is great advice—although painful! Going to have to buckle down and actually do the damn thing.